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请英语高手帮我点评一下我的这篇英语四级作文.
1有些人认为某些数字会带来好运
2也有些人认为数字与运气无关
3试说明自己的看法
Fromtheancienttimestothepresent,therearesomepeoplethinkthatthenumberhavemagicpowerandsomegoodnumberswillbringthemgoodluck.ManyChinesebusinessmanlikethenumberof8andtheyholdthatitmeanswealth.Mostimportantly,itwilllettheirbusinessgettingbetterandbetter.Morover,apartofhighschoolstudents,especiallythestudentswhoareabouttoattendtheuniversityentranceexamination.Theyliketochoosetheseatswhichnumberis"8","18","28"."38"or"58",becausetheyconsideredthenumberwillhelpthemtopasstheexamorentertheuniversityeasily.
Toughsomepeoplethinkthatthegoodnumberswillbringgoodlucktothemselves,butasectionofpeopleholdwhatevertheyareluckyornot,itisunconcemedwiththegoodnimberorbadnumber.Theybelieveinifapeoplewhoareworkinghardorstudyinghard,heshouldbecomealuckyman.Onthecentrary,thelazypeoplewhoalwaysstayathomeandhaven'twork,butheoftenhopeagoodnumberof8willbringgoodlucktothemselves,itjustadream!
AsfarasI'mconcerned,Ithinkitisabsurdthatagoodnumbercanhelpustopasstheexamorgetmoremoney.Soeverypeopleshouldworkorstudyhardlyandshouldn'tmakeafetishosagoodnumber,suchas"8","18"or"28".
刘嘉勇回答：
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Fromtheancienttimestothepresent,therearepeoplethinkingthatnumbersmayhavemagicpowerandsomespecificnumberswillbringthemgoodluck.ManyChinesebusinessmenlikethenumberof8andtheyholdthatitmeansprosperity.Mostimportantly,itwillmaketheirbusinessgettingbetterandbetter.Morover,somehighschoolstudents,especiallythosewhoareabouttoattendtheuniversityentranceexamination,liketochoosetheseatsnumbered8,18,28,38or58,becausetheyconsideredthenumberswillhelpthempasstheexamorenteruniversitieseasily.
Althoughsomepeoplethinkthatgoodnumberswillbringgoodluck,othersholdwhatevertheyareluckyornot,totallyunconcernedwiththegoodnumbersorbadnumbers.Theybelieveinifanyoneisworkinghardorstudyinghard,heshouldbecomealuckyman.Onthecontrary,lazypeoplewhoalwaysstayathomeandhaven'tworked,butheoftenhopeagoodnumberof8willbringgoodlucktothemselves,itjustadream!
AsfarasI'mconcerned,Ithinkitisabsurdthatagoodnumbercanhelpuspassexamsormakemoremoney.Soeverybodyshouldworkorstudyhardandshouldn'tmakeafussoveragoodnumber,suchas"8","18"or"28".
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